Just some criticisms
I'm only trying to offer constructive criticism and in no way am I trying to insult you or bash your series.
In the passed I wrote some reviews for these series which were less than nice.
If you want to be a comedy writer you need to practice more than just vulgarity. I felt you used it as a clutch through most of it, if not all of it. Don't get me wrong, you had a lot of things worth smiling at; mostly the beginning of the picture show but the obsenities and sex themes got boring quick.
You've got non-sequitor down.
The biggest problem is the plot. I couldn't find it. I know it's three parts long, but gar; I just can't do it, I can't sit through another. Is it just three kids day at school?
On the other hand:
The animation isn't professional, but the amount of work that went into it is obvious. The backgrounds weren't bad, not bad at all, and there's definately attention to detail. I'm mostly criticizing your humor.
I know your general response is "You need a sense of humor!!..." but I don't think thats it. It's just a lot of swearing with sex jokes.
But it's not all bad.
thank you thank you i appreciate the constructive criticism BUT you need to watch all 3 parts because this is 1 episode, you cant judge an episode if you just watch the first third because theres no climax, storyline or action yet... it was too big to upload as 1 full episode and im really disappointed because people think that Part 1 is the episode but its not even close, please if u have the time watch the other 2 parts! Part 3 is rated 4.3/5 and has ALL great reviews :)
What happened to his voice?!
Well I'm a HUGE fan of Ingus. To see I'm 3 years late for an update upsets me; but, alas I caught it and I feel like Ingus is missing. It just doesn't feel the same anymore.
I know the animation style wasn't yours but you did animate it none the less. I think this was brilliantly done. You made it worth watching (length-wise) and comedic (vent-wise).
I'm glad it wasn't just some random parts throughout the game, it actually had short story plot development.
Right on to ya mate!
Hope you make some more with some different games too.
Not enough SPLODE!
I'm trigger happy :(
5 splodes took forever, kinda wish it felt more random then timed.
Was pretty cool, good time waster.
It's more of a copy and paste then a tutorial
it wasn't TERRIBLE but there's a few bugs.
1. It says use the arrow keys to move but its WASD
2. I jumped off the platform and the guy just kept falling (infinite loop i assume)
It was ok, but for tutorials sake explain some of the actionscript to the viewer so they know what they're pasting if they want to alter variables like speed or jump height or things of that nature.
omfg thanks for telling me that! I JUST REALIZED I NEVER FIXED THAT TYPO! I'll go do it right now!
First time through...
First time through I couldn't fine out how to trigger the mail to come so I played the entire thing with out scanning 1 barcode. I was peeved at first but after reading some comments I figured out to trigger it.
Pretty cool, it was WAY better when you had the barcode. The secret messages were really cool.
I'm getting down to this
I really like the sound you're going for. Easy to kinda just lull out to. Nothing to complicated but I like it.
Like you said though, go for more of that industrial sound or hell go with some really hard sounds like trash can lids lol. Might go well.
This makes me want to listen to Stomp
So you like it!! AWESOME!! lol. i thought this shit would get flamed as soon as it got put up. and if i could find trash can lids i would so use them. but idk alot about FL yet, so im sure i wont find them. lol. Ty again. :)
I have to admit the comments made the submission way better. Your take on the situation is fantastic; loved it.
Thanks a lot! I put a lot of work into my paintings :)
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